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Traffic and transport essay- cause &solution..In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is as problem what are the causes and solutions ?

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Nowadays,
traffic
 issues are
inclined
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occurring
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 all over the globe.
This
 essay intends to delve into the cause of
this
 situation and suggest some ways to alleviate
this
 problem. Considering the cause, one of the predominant causes is that
people
 are more used to private vehicles than public vehicles.
People
 believe personal vehicles are the fastest and most comfortable way to reach a destination.
As a result
,
traffic
 hassles inclined day by day. Another concrete reason is that
people
 do not follow the rules and regulations.
For instance
, some youngsters have an attitude to break the signals even if they
got
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get
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 punishment.
Therefore
 increase the
traffic
 conjunction and other communities
are
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will
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also
 suffer.
last
 but not
the
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least, some roads are too narrow
according to
 the population of the cities.
Therefore
, many adverse effects occur
such
 as wastage of fuels, pollution, and so on. By discussing the suggestions,
Administration
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the Administration
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 can take contingent steps to alleviate
this
 issue. They can improve the quality of the public vehicle.
For instance
, Delhi authorities started a metro train with more facilities and affordable rates.
Consequently
, all
people
 are more prefer public transportation.
In addition
 to that, authorities should introduce strict legislation to mitigate the worst situation caused by society. Another solution is for the parliament to make roads wider. So,
people
 can use it efficiently.
To conclude
, there are innumerable causes of
traffic
 issues but systematic input from the government can solve
this
 problem.
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task achievement
Ensure your essay addresses all aspects of the task. While you mentioned causes and solutions clearly, try to incorporate a wider range of ideas to fully develop each point.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your main points. This will help clarify your arguments and present a stronger case.
coherence cohesion
Work on your transitions and paragraphing to further enhance the logical flow of your essay. Linking sentences and paragraphs more smoothly can improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical structures and vocabulary. While the message is conveyed well overall, small improvements in language usage can make your essay more compelling and easier to read.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction and conclusion are well-presented, giving a clear overview and summary of the topic.
logical structure
The essay on the whole follows a logical structure, presenting causes followed by solutions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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