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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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In the current era, some
countries
 are largely dependent on other
countries
 to meet their
food
 demands.
This
 essay explains the several drawbacks and a plethora of advantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, It is inevitable that a single country can not cultivate all variations of
food
 commodities. In fact, due to the geographical location of
countries
, each may be best suited for developing a limited set of products.
Therefore
, importing
food
 enables citizens to have access to all types of products.
This
 can increase the health rate of nations that are performing poorly in domestic production.
For example
, African
countries
 that are located in poor climate conditions for farming, are taking advantage of
this
 trend.
In addition
, if
countries
 make contractions about importing and exporting foods based on their requirements, they can progress economically.
On the other hand
, as there are two sides to a coin, a country had better not be entirely dependent on other
countries
 to meet their nutritional needs. A dependent nation may confront famine and starvation if foreign
countries
 cease exporting
food
.
Also
, if a nation refuses to purchase indigenous goods, vacancies in agricultural sectors may go unfilled and farmers may seek other employment opportunities.
This
 incident can lead to economic crises and downturns. To sum up, I believe if there are no other choices, importing foods can be beneficial. Yet exceeding in utilizing imported foods and refusing to stay loyal to local production can adversely affect the economical situation.
Thus
 keeping the balance is the best choice.
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