Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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significant impact on us. There are many advantages of
music
bring to individuals,
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, releasing one's stress by listening to
music
is helpful because
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is an effective medicine for someone who was
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that
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can motivate an individual's inspiration, making them become more creative and innovative when they spend more time
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listening to
music
. Not only for adults but
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important for children to learn with
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However
, some people have different
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they opposed to
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due to the negative impact
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society. Some
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musicians
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lyrics related to sex and violence in their
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, along with the popularity of
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nowadays, these songs became well-known and even built a trend
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society. Obviously, some parents might be worried that the songs would result in
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negative influence on their children. Thinking of the behaviours described in the lyrics were trendy, trying to imitate the behaviours of musicians or their peers. In conclusion,
music
had both advantages and drawbacks above mentioned. In my opinion,
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but our societies because we all realized the benefits of
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, it can heal one's heart and give us support when we felt disappointed. Overall, the negative influence of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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