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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Technology has grown a lot in recent days.
This
 development enables
people
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 way of
communication
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communicate
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 more efficient than in the past. I strongly believe that the mode of
communication
 helps
people
 in their own flexibility to speak with family members, improve
communication
 at work and express their thoughts with more clarity. Modern
communication
 provides comfortability to communicate with others. In the past,
people
 write a letter to their family members and it takes a month or even more to reach them because
of
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the new era of
communication
 helps
people
 to communicate their thoughts in a fraction of seconds.
For example
, my grandfather was a military officer and he wrote a letter to me when he was in service, but it took a month to reach me. The recent development contributes more in favour of
people
 to reduce the timeframe. The interactions at the workplace have improved away far from in the past.
People
 who
works
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 in an organisation send an email to their customer and wait for their response.
However
, the help of recent advancements provides flexibility to connect with them through the teams, skype and so on.
For example
, my cousin worked in one of the biggest multinational companies as a project manager and he used to connect with his clients using the
teams
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team's
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 application. Modern technology helps organisations will organize their work. To conclude, the improvement in technology is vast .It has done a big radical shift in
people
's way of
communication
.
This
 helps
people
 to chat with their friends on their own comfortable and it enhances the working style of the organisation.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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