Many people think that increasing business and cultural relationship between different countries is positive development. Others believe that this might be reason of loss of national identities of the country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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era of globalisation, the
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is considered to be a global village as
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, tourism, politics, films, music, literature and arts are not restricted within a country’s border.
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international
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opportunity and cultural exchange surely bring many positive
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while the negative impacts cannot be ignored as well.
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these two views and expresses my personal opinion on
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. On one hand, the positive outcomes of cross-cultural activities and international
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are immense. In
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age of modern technology and
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people
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have access to films, music, arts, language, cultures and many other
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of other countries.
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trade
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and
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opportunities have helped
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all over the
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to purchase and sell products at a competitive price and they have far more options nowadays than
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past. Crops grown in a distant village or dresses designed by
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rural labour have got a
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market and
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has helped to fight the most vicious problem in the
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- hunger. Someone can feel hatred and anger
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other
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only if his vision was blurred
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the propaganda.
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have a very negative image of Western
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and
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could be resolved only by cultural contact. Eventually,
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will find that they are all the same apart from their religious and cultural differences. So, from
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point, it can be inferred that cultural contact between
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can maintain
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peace.
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,
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who are worried about
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globalisation, international
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and cultural exchanges opine that
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very trend is detrimental to a country’s own
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and tradition. They are right to some extent, but I personally believe that
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is ever-changing and if
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exchange cultures, it will not diminish their own
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. Rather it would enrich a country’s own
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. History
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teaches us that many cultural and traditional
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are borrowed from other
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and
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has, in fact, a positive impact. Considering both of these views, I would surmise that protecting our own
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or tradition would depend on us and it would not be harmed by our
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relations and cultural contact with other
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. National identities are represented by
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citizens and heritage and
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why when citizens of a country would be benefitted from international
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and cross-cultural contacts, they would
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be able to highlight their own cultural
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to the
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