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Some people believe that machine translation is very advanced, children do not have to learn a foreign language from primary school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Most people believe that machine
translation
 is so useful and advanced.
As a
result
, their children do not need to learn a foreign
language
 from elementary school anymore. In
this
 essay, I will provide why I strongly disagree with
this
 idea and I will give relevant examples to support my idea on
this
 topic. The
first
 point that I disagree with the idea that children do not have to study a
language
 from their school anymore is the complexity of
language
.
In other
words
, the complexity of
language
 is more complicated and hard than we think.
As a
result
, the tool or machine
translation
 cannot explain or describe those
words
 or
language
 to us depending on the situation that we face as distinct as possible.
For example
, some
words
 may have various meanings to be described relying on the specific situation.
Consequently
, if we use
translation
 technology, we cannot obtain the meanings of those
words
 that are suitable for the specific situation.
Moreover
, keep using the
translation
 machines all the time is not profitable for us because we will think that we do not have to study and pay any attention to the
language
 due to the fact that we have advanced technology that helps us.
As a
result
, the
language
 skills or other skills which are necessary and important to communicate to others that we will receive if we decide to learn the
language
 will not obtain from the learning process. In conclusion, As mentioned above, I deeply disagree with the notion that children do not need to study a foreign wording anymore if the
translation
 device or application will be more advanced in the future because the
result
 of taking the measure will provide more disadvantageous than we think in the upcoming time.
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