Some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country, while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting a major sporting event outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some individuals are of the opinion that hosting multinational

sport

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tournament

is advantageous for the

host

Nation

Although

some people disagree with

this

view. Personally, I think it has

a great benefits

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great benefits

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because it increases the economic

growth

of the

State

and infrastructural development,but not without a drawback. There are some distinct advantages of

been

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host

State

multinational

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a multinational

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sport

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sports

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tournament

Firstly

, there is increased economic

growth

because many

tourist

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tourists

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, sportsmen and women will

flee

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fly

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apply

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from different States thereby

increase

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increasing

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the

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internally

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internal

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internally

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generated revenue.

For example

, the Commonwealth games held in

Brimingham

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Birmingham

attracted over 500 thousand sportsmen and women and spectators who Lodged ,shopped and travelled

round

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around

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the city.

Secondly

, there is infrastructural development within the

Nation

especially

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,especially

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the

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in the

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hosting location. The country will not allow other Nations to see them in their worst

state

, so they use it as an opportunity to improve the overall scenery of the

State

Thus

, it is obvious that multinational

sports

tournament

benefits the

host

Nation

in terms of financial

growth

On the other hand

, there is one major drawback to the hosting of world

sports

tournament

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tournaments

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. At

first

, the country

spend

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more which runs them into debt that takes years to pay.

This

means that they spend heavily on

this project

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these projects

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like building

standard

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the standard

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stadium

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stadiums

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, hotels hospitals and other facilities which might not be used to generate any

fund

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funds

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after the event.

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, it is estimated that about $100 billion was spent on the just

conclude

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Olympic games held in Beijing, which is quite exorbitant for a

nation

with the recent inflation all over the world. So, without

doubt

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gelding

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sports

event runs the

countries

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country's

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economy dry and

also

come

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comes

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with indebtedness. Conclusively, I believe that

been

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host

Nation

for Multinational

sports

event

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has both merit and demerit.

However

, the benefits

outweighs

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the drawbacks because it increases the

countries over

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country's

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development

both

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capital and structural

growth

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

318 words

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Some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country, while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting a major sporting event outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Young people spend less of their free time with their family nowadays. What are the reasons for this? Are there more negative or positive sides to this trend?

Nowadays, many people with families leave their country to work abroad. Do you think the benefits of this trend outweigh the disadvantages for the families?