Some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country, while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting a major sporting event outweigh the disadvantages?

Some individuals are of the opinion that hosting multinational
sport
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tournament
is advantageous for the
host
Nation
.
Although
some people disagree with
this
view. Personally, I think it has
a great benefits
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because it increases the economic
growth
of the
State
and infrastructural development,but not without a drawback. There are some distinct advantages of
been
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a
host
State
of
multinational
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sport
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tournament
.
Firstly
, there is increased economic
growth
because many
tourist
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, sportsmen and women will
flee
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in
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from different States thereby
increase
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the
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internal
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generated revenue.
For example
, the Commonwealth games held in
Brimingham
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Birmingham
attracted over 500 thousand sportsmen and women and spectators who Lodged ,shopped and travelled
round
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the city.
Secondly
, there is infrastructural development within the
Nation
especially
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the
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hosting location. The country will not allow other Nations to see them in their worst
state
, so they use it as an opportunity to improve the overall scenery of the
State
.
Thus
, it is obvious that multinational
sports
tournament
benefits the
host
Nation
in terms of financial
growth
.
On the other hand
, there is one major drawback to the hosting of world
sports
tournament
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tournaments
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. At
first
, the country
spend
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more which runs them into debt that takes years to pay.
This
means that they spend heavily on
this project
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these projects
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like building
standard
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stadium
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stadiums
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, hotels hospitals and other facilities which might not be used to generate any
fund
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funds
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after the event.
For example
, it is estimated that about $100 billion was spent on the just
conclude
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Olympic games held in Beijing, which is quite exorbitant for a
nation
with the recent inflation all over the world. So, without
doubt
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gelding
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a
sports
event runs the
countries
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economy dry and
also
come
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with indebtedness. Conclusively, I believe that
been
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a
host
Nation
for Multinational
sports
event
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events
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has both merit and demerit.
However
, the benefits
outweighs
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the drawbacks because it increases the
countries over
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country's
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development
both
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capital and structural
growth
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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