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Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children have a poor influence on them and can affect their relationship with parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #advertisements #children #influence #relationship #parents
It is irrefutable that, adverts
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 vital role in
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fer
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for
 individuals opine that juveniles are targeted in a negative way with the exposure of advertisements . I,
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contends
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 that
this
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wrong
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 effect on younger ones.
This
 essay articulates my agreement points in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are various reasons why people oppose ads . The
first
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many advertisement companies target
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selling top brands images like Nike , MC Donald's , Reebok etc .
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 they use glamorous people for their adverts in
such
 a way to lure more customers. Many young children are influenced by
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,
thus
 they pester their parents to buy
such
 things . If they did not get the desired product most
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juvenile
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the juvenile
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 ends up doing petty crimes to
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
 their desires .
For instance
 , a report shown in a popular magazine address the problem of juvenile delinquency which is because of negative influence by the media and peer pressure. Probing ahead , there are many other factors which
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effect
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 children . The major one is that
,
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advertiser
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advertisers
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 mislead
masses
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 by showing ads in a way that
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sense
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 of completion.
Furthermore
, they display unhealthy products on
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 which has
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a detrimental
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 effect on
health
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 of buyers . To exemplify,
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research conducted by the health administration of India , stated that the raw material used by many big companies
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 unhealthy and
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 many health ailments to the locals . To recapitulate, I, reiterate my aforementioned statement by saying that ,
advertisement
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advertisements
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 have
adverse
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an adverse
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 impact on children and
also
 create conflicts between families.
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