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It is more important to use the space in cities well than make them look beautiful. To what extent do you agree.

#space #cities
The growing urban
aglomeration
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agglomeration
agglomerations
lead
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 to
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necessity
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necesity
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necessity
 of
well used
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spaces
 in
cities
in
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detriment
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 of good look and nice
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design
designe
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design
. Some people think,
well used
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 spots in
cities
 are more important than their appearance, others have different
oppinion
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opinion
opinions
. I agree with both
side
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 and I think , using places efficiently in towns is as important as the nice look of them.
Firstly
, the increasing
number of
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population in
cities
 is one of the
reason
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 why is so important that,
spaces
 in
urban
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an urban
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area
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to
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be used efficiently. Nowadays many governments fight with
defficiens
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deficiency
efficient
deficient
 of housing and lack of office and commercial spots in urban
aglomerations
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agglomerations
agglomeration
. Consequences of space deficiency are the
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growing
gowing
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growing
accomodation
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accommodation
 prices and with it
also
 the growing homelessness.
On the other hand
, the appearance of a city is not negligible
to
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, well being and the
moral
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morale
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 of
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population
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depends
depended
dependes
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depends
 on it.
For example
 , a
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study
studie
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study
 showed people who are living in
nice
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a nice
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area
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areas
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 with parks and clean
playground
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 are more happier and relaxed than those who have houses in aglomerated and
greenless
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greens
greenness
spaces
. In conclusion, well
using
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 of
spaces
 in
cities
 and the good looking of the towns have
same
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 importance and with proper local administration both can be made in a nice combination
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