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Some people spend a lot of money on weddings. Why do they do this? Do you think it is good to spend a lot of money on weddings?

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Some would argue that it is correct for couples to throw large
parties
 on their wedding
day
, while others believe that it is a waste of hard-earned
money
. While
marriage
day
 comes once in a lifetime to share the joy with loved ones, I believe that the wedding couple has to face monetary issues in the coming years. Many couples seek
marriage
 as a special
day
 to make it memorable for their entire life. Due to
this
,
people
 who are marrying plan to spend an enormous amount of
money
 on the wedding
day
. They are often influenced by elite
people
 who spend lavishly on organising the royal
parties
 in big hotels.
For example
, a recent study showed that 52% of wedding couples admitted to organising a large gathering during their
marriage
 when they were shown royal
parties
. It is not deniable that
marriage
 is a special
day
 for everyone;
however
,
people
 must have to think about the future consequences of big
parties
. After
marriage
 ceremonies, there is a huge financial burden on a married couple which takes years to repay to lenders.
Therefore
, both have to work
day
 and night to earn
money
 for livelihood and loan repayment.
For instance
, if you want to organise a large reception at your wedding, in India, you would have to spend at least Rs. 10,00,000 for a decent gathering; and it takes around five years to the repayment of the loan. In spite of
this
,
people
 still go for organising large marriages, even if they face financial insecurities in future. In conclusion,
although
 the wedding
day
 is an important occasion for everyone, the
people
 who are marrying, must consider the
money
 factor while organising wedding
parties
. To conclude,
although
 many
people
 believe that spending a lot of
money
 on marriages would bring happiness and contentment, I personally think that
such
 occasions are a waste of
money
. Saving
this
money
 for use in the future is a much better idea.
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