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Some people spend a lot of money on weddings. Why do they do this? Do you think it is good to spend a lot of money on weddings?

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Some would argue that it is correct for couples to throw large
parties
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 on their wedding
day
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, while others believe that it is a waste of hard-earned
money
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. While
marriage
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day
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 comes once in a lifetime to share the joy with loved ones, I believe that the wedding couple has to face monetary issues in the coming years. Many couples seek
marriage
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 as a special
day
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 to make it memorable for their entire life. Due to
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,
people
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 who are marrying plan to spend an enormous amount of
money
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 on the wedding
day
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. They are often influenced by elite
people
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 who spend lavishly on organising the royal
parties
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 in big hotels.
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, a recent study showed that 52% of wedding couples admitted to organising a large gathering during their
marriage
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 when they were shown royal
parties
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. It is not deniable that
marriage
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 is a special
day
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 for everyone;
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,
people
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 must have to think about the future consequences of big
parties
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. After
marriage
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 ceremonies, there is a huge financial burden on a married couple which takes years to repay to lenders.
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, both have to work
day
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 and night to earn
money
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 for livelihood and loan repayment.
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, if you want to organise a large reception at your wedding, in India, you would have to spend at least Rs. 10,00,000 for a decent gathering; and it takes around five years to the repayment of the loan. In spite of
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,
people
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 still go for organising large marriages, even if they face financial insecurities in future. In conclusion,
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 the wedding
day
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 is an important occasion for everyone, the
people
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 who are marrying, must consider the
money
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 factor while organising wedding
parties
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. To conclude,
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 many
people
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 believe that spending a lot of
money
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 on marriages would bring happiness and contentment, I personally think that
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 occasions are a waste of
money
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. Saving
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money
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 for use in the future is a much better idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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