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In cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours. There is no longer sense of community. What do you think are the causes of this problem and suggest methods to solve it?

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There has been a phenomenon that an increasing number of
people
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 do not know their
neighbours
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. I think there are some reasons and methods that can solve it.
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, is the prolonged working time. Due to technological development, we are more closely linked globally. There are hundreds and thousands of international transactions happening every day, and our life is more convenient now.
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,
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 technology brings convenience to us, our working hours are extended. In the past, we only had to work until 5 PM, but now, in order to tackle many global transaction issues, we are always asked to work overtime.
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, we spend most of our time working, and we are too exhausted to meet new
people
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,
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 as our
neighbours
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.
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, the younger generation thinks their
neighbours
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 are less important. Take me as an example. I'm an outgoing person, and I love chatting with friends.
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, whenever I meet my
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, I don't really talk to them. Not only because they are older than me but
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 because we don't have any hobbies in common. In
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 case, I believe many young
people
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 have the same feeling that
neighbours
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 are just
people
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 who live
next
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 to you, it doesn't mean they are your friends.
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, if everyone keeps aloof from his neighbour,
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 there is no longer sense of community. At
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 point, I believe it's necessary to have a good relationship with your
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.
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, you can prepare some gifts for the new
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 or bake some homemade cakes. Take me as an example. The
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 day when I moved to my community, one of my
neighbours
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 sent me some homemade chocolate; I was touched and invited him for dinner. In conclusion, there are two main reasons and the method.

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