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The charts below the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts depict the figure for financial help that four nations, namely
China
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, Indonesia, Thailand and South Africa received as well as the donation
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spent in 1974 and 2014. Overall, it is evident that
China
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 had a great development, which did not need
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much more help from others, and the distribution of monetary had a significant reduction during the period in question. As can be seen, South Africa got 65
million
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 supportive money in 1974, and
China
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 received 62
million
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, which is more than Indonesia and Thailand.
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, when the time came to 2014, the financial aid for
China
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decreased dramatically, which is the least among other countries.
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, the other three nations
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 reduced the aid from countries. Moving on to the line chart, Medicine had been the majority of the utilised in donation with 80
million
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. ,
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 in terms of use was catering and finance with 70
million
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 in 1974. The three aspects saw an interesting change during the period in thirty years, financial has allocated to the most with 64
million
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 and catering has a slump to 15
million
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 in 2014. Meanwhile, the financial aid from worldwide has reduced from 220
million
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 in 1974 to 140
million
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 in 2014.
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