Today some people have to work away from their family. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Nowadays, a significant number of people
are migrate
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to find a job in other nations and
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away from their parents, children and spouse. While there are many benefits to working in different countries, there are
also
some drawbacks to consider. On the one hand, many believe that the benefits from the mentioned reason cannot be ignored.
To begin
with, due to economic problems the poor people or some, which do not have a suitable job and couldn't find one for themselves may
looking
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for it in
another cities
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.
That is
to say, they might be suffering from financial issues and to get rid of
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they should be living
in
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far
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distance from their family.
For instance
, when you look
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, it can be seen that many Afghanish
worker
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are working in Iran far from their families.
Moreover
, when they want to progress,
this
reason is
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chance for them.
This
in turn probable has a positive impact on their lifestyle
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and affects their
children
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futures.
On the other hand
, others argue that
this
action will have irreparable consequences. The main reason justifying their belief is that being with family cannot be replaced by anything.
In other words
, labours who are far from their province in some cases
they
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may feel
loneliness
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and homeless. More specifically,
this
change in their life leads to depression and other mental illnesses in them. A good example of
this
is children that are living without their parents and their supporter might feel emptiness in their lives and face more serious problems in the future.
Furthermore
, the one who
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to migrate should be aware of its both profits and harms. For many, the only positive point
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this
act is living in
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wealthy
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condition
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. To sum up, it really depends on
people
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situation to decide
living
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far from their family with
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income, or with them but in hard
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. So, both sides of the story must be considered. Progress in life always requires hard work.
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