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Some people say that cars are the best to use in cities while others think that bicycle are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

#people #cars #cities #bicycle
There are two beliefs about transport options in the capital,
car
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cars in
cities
in contrast
 to riding
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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 is the
mater
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 which has
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not
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ends
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single
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 answer. both of them have their own pros and cons which we will discuss
about
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them. I opine with the later view. In one point of view, riding
bicycle
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 in crowded
cities
 could be the best option to reduce
niose
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noise
 and traffic,
however
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 it should not be forgotten that
this
 choice has some prerequisites that must be considered.
first
 of all, the architecture of the city is the most important part.
This
 means is there any dedicated lane for bicycles
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 the street? because the safety of the riders has the highest priority. based on the
Dr.
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 John
Smith
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researches
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 which
has
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 published on 2019 in New York Times, the
bicycle
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number of bicycle
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 accidents
at
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the
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cities
 without
bicycle
 route is 72.3% higher than
the
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those
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other
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number of other
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 that has
it
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. The other major benefit of
this
 transporting method is its positive
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effect
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affect
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effect
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 on city traffic.
For instance
, in Amsterdam,
number
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 of bikes are 1.7
time
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 more than the cars and the traffic
of
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 streets without
bike
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a bike
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 is imaginable.
on the other hand
, using the
car
 is
undeniable
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an undeniable
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 need of the 21st century; especially in developed
cities
that
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 places are located not close to each other and need to drive there.
However
, the major problem
of
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 using
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a car
the car
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car
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 is finding
place
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a place
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 to park and obeying the driving
principals
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principles
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. in conclusion, my opinion about those ideas is despite using the
car
 is easier and more reachable but we must consider
the
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environmental care and try to keep the ease and
careness
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careless
 balanced.
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