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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think a role of a parent should be in their child education.

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Some
kids
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 get almost no cheering from their
parents
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with
with the
 respect to their academic achievement at
school
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,while other youngsters get a lot of compulsion from their exuberant
parents
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 which can affect the child negatively. I believe
parents
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 force their
children
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 to achieve academic excellence because
other
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 high
reputation
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 of some
parents
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 in society and some
parents
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 their
kids
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 to be like them.I
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 suggest the duty of
parents
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 in
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the ward's
 education are to offer support and to read together.I will elaborate more on
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 in my essay.
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 with high society recognization impose a lot of educational content on their
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 that,they begin to force the child to study all
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 of books to become
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scorer
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.
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 is because they don’t want their
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 to be tarnished.They
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therefore
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 go to the extreme to see to it that
theirward's
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their ward's
their wards
 performance at
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 is always high.
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,Some
parent
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 want their
children
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 to be like them in terms of academics and these
parents
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 uplift their
kids
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 with coercion,in order to achieve exactly what they achieved when they were in
school
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. Research conducted by the Ghana education service shows that about 60% of
kids
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 who perform well in
school
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 but are not cheerful are due to parental influence.
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 is a result of their own selfishness to secure their
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.
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,I believe
parents
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 have a lot of responsibilities to play in the academic life of their
kids
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such
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 as offering support to their
children
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.
This
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 increases their confidence level in every aspect of their life.Providing support to
kids
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 even if they perform poorly at
school
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 encourages them to do better
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 time.Again,
parents
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 should read together with their
Children
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 by doing assignments with them,Visiting the library together and solving examination questions together.
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 Will inculcate the energy of learning in the child thereby improving his or her study abilities.
For instance
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,My Junior brother who was academically down improved his academic scores when my Mother supported him by encouraging him and studying with him with the least chance she got. In conclusion,In my opinion,I think
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use
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 force on their kid's performance at
school
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 because they want to sustain their
reputation
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 in the community,and some
also
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 want their
kids
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 to achieve exactly what they achieved academically.
However
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,I
also
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 believe parental roles
such
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 as supporting your wards as well as learning with them should be imputed in their child’s education.
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