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Some people believe that traveling with in a city is better by a car while other think bicycle is better means. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Travelling nowadays has become more accessible to everyone. We now have several options in choosing our way of transportation. Some people prefer going by
a
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car while others enjoy the fresh air brought by riding on a
bike
. Both are great ways to get to our desired destinations but each has its own pros and cons. Travelling in a city by automobile is the fastest. You can
also
 avoid the heat of the sun because it has its own roof and the built air conditioner is
such
 a great addition too. In terms of comfort, it is superior.
However
, getting to places by car means you have to purchase gasoline every now and
then
 which is unfortunately costly.
Also
, gasoline contributes to the worsening of our environment because it produces gas pollution and carbon dioxide. Meanwhile, getting on a
bike
 could be a fun adventure. Aside from paying for the vehicle itself, everything else is free of cost as you do not have to pay for gasoline, insurance, and others. It is
also
 a form of exercise which is great if you are looking into getting in shape.
Although
 owning a
bike
 sounds nice, it has its disadvantages too. One of them is the weather condition. Travelling by bicycle on a rainy day is not the ideal way of getting to a place. Another problem that could occur is its lack of safety.
bike
 riders do not have an airbag to protect its passenger and are always exposed to danger. In my opinion, owning
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 auto is expensive but the advantages it brings outweigh the disadvantages. Safety should be one of the topmost priorities and we should never disregard it. As technology evolves, we are getting closer to a car
that is
 safe, cost-efficient, and good for the environment.
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