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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solution are there to solve this problem.?

#threats #environment
Climate change is one of the principal dangers facing
people
this
 century
also
 ocean levels are increasing dramatically,
this
 essay,will
first
 circumstance the difficulty as a matter of the fact involve introducing
flood
 protection as a solution for the phenomenon.
First
 and foremost, the dilemma caused by climbing sea levels together with floods can destroy
people
's residents utterly. millions of
people
 all around the world live in coastal
areas
 which could be firmly affected by floods and can submerge individuals in all properties. for ,instance a heavy torrent in Japan that had been placed in 2009 had led to catastrophic damage and an enormous number of
people
 to have lost their homes.
On the other hand
, there are several solutions that can be offered for
this
 issue as providing
flood
 defences in harmful
areas
 which can be impressively damaged near rivers vicinities or beach
areas
.
Flood
 defences
such
 as dikes and dams and
flood
 gates, could be built along waterways, thereby stopping the
water
 from reaching a populated area
for
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 example, the Netherlands is one of the most populated
areas
 with a high-density citizenry in
areas
 that are close to oceans so far
this
 country is supremely vulnerable in front of outbursts in sea levels.
however
, the country has succeeded to provide adequate and various kinds of
water
 defences against any probability. To conclude, whereas rising tides caused by increasing global temperature is one of the vital challenges, we have faced in the twenty-
first
 century and could cause many cities to be left under the
water
,
,
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nevertheless
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 a possible determination could utilize
water
 hinters around residential
areas
 that are near the rivers or seas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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