some people believe that after the child begins his/her schooling their teacher will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Education is very crucial in everybody's life. Some communities argue that children will be more influenced by their
faculty
rather than their
parents
.
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essay describes both sides of the given statement. On the one side, In
this
competitive world, the heir is spending
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most day in
school
to achieve their goals. And the academy era is more compared to home day. In
this
,way
their
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is getting more influenced by their
faculty
compared to their
parents
. Due to
parents
,
schedule
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they
also
provide tuition to their offspring after
school
.
This
reason engenders to spend lack of era with their offspring.
For instance
, a child will go to
school
and spend 10 hours per day in the
school
itself. Afterwards, his/her
parents
will send him/her to tuition. In
this
,way offspring have more influenced by
faculty
rather than their
parents
. On the other side, offspring are influenced by their
parents
and
faculty
depends on their parent's behaviour. Even if offspring spend less time with their
parents
they will care for their
parents
more and listen to their words. To sum up, I agree with the given statement that offspring are influenced more by their teachers rather than their
parents
. To build their standards offspring are spending more time in
academy
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the academy
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with their teachers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • academic performance
  • character
  • values
  • upbringing
  • personality
  • education
  • guidance
  • collaboration
  • nurturing
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