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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media. Discuss bot views and give your opinion?

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In
this
 modern developed society,
news
 plays a very crucial role. Some pupils believe that
newspapers
 are salient to read the
news
 while other argue with
this
 phenomenon that, they prefer social
media
. In
this
 essay, I agree with the
second
 statement and will see both sides of view. On the one side,
Newspapers
 are great experts who provide reports. Through
this
source
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,source
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 we get standard data. But there are some disadvantages regarding
newspapers
that is
 it is not user friendly to carry everywhere. Even though India is the world's biggest country to prefer
newspapers
 to read messages meanwhile some other countries stopped using
newspapers
 as their cause to read the
news
.
On the other hand
, Social
media
 is one of the modern technologies used as an origin to read the
news
.Most pupils are preferring social
media
 because it is convenient to use. Pupils are good at browsing the internet, so it is easy for them to use
media
 of their origin.
For example
, some countries like the USA are preferring social
media
 as their expert to read the
news
. In conclusion, I agree with the people who prefer social
media
 as their source of
news
. Through social ,
media
 people get infinite data and will get updated according to the technology.
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