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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problems?

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It is true that some people believe that for upbringing
children
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, the whole family including
relatives
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 is a better option than only their biological
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 approach has its drawbacks, the benefits of
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 kind of nurturing are more useful for
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’s lives. On the one hand, in the globalised modern world, raising young people needs more
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 while working
parents
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 do not have adequate
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 for their families.
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 s aunts, uncles and particularly grandparents can devote their
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 to adolescents,
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, youngsters can learn various ideas about life as well as lifestyle and interaction with other peers.
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,
children
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 can spend their
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 with extended family in case of holiday or weekend and it is a positive development in bringing up the youth.
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,
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 can share their informative experiences with them and
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 sometimes they can support financially in case of a lack of budget for
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 for a situation like extracurricular activities.
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,
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 have the responsibility for upbringing their boys and girls.
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parents
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 are more aware of their needs and emotions, according to recent investigations, they do not accept their
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’
advices
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 and prefer
relatives
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, in the case of assignments
children
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 do not incline to teach by
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, a number of young
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 do not have childcare experience and they should rely on grandparents who are a source of wisdom and enormous experiences. In conclusion,
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parents
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 have a close relationship with their
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, because of a lack of
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 and experience it is better to count on extended
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 that can nurture young people and teach them how to live in the world.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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