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Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of punishments has changed through time. Imprisonment has been a procedure to treat criminals for decades, even though educating the offenders could be an alternative. I believe that educating people at some points, has an important role in the criminal justice system. In
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 essay, I will give some arguments to support my ideas. There are two reasons why I partly concur to provide outlaws with
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 rather than send them to jail. One main cause of
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 is poverty, unemployment, and lack of
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. If the outlaws can get educated in a specific field, they will have a chance to apply for jobs. While employment gives a
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 out of poverty, it
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 gives them a structured day, which helps them as well.
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 helps them to get out of their old behaviour and pattern which
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 leads often to reoffending.
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, convicting people to jail sentences is the only
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. Many outlaws are offenders of the duty of the law to protect the innocent, the society.
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 profilers have discovered that for ,instance serial killer has certain patterns. Rather than release them after their prison doctors should treat them in psychological facilities
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 there is a high chance, that they will convict murderers again. Is imprisonment the only
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 to fight
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? Overall, it depends on the
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. In petty ,crimes
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 to help to become better humans. Anyway, in some cases locking the offenders away is the only
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