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Some peope believe that nowadyas we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#peope #nowadyas #choices
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Recently, There are many things that people can do in their life compared with the past so some think that there are a diversity of
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 that individuals can open in their life. In my view, I agree with that because everyone can work and
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 what they want.
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 of all, these days there are many opportunities for working that people can benefit from it that they hadn't in the past,
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 now anyone can work what they like without any restrictions because there are varieties of fields that can use it.
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, in ,Japan there are more than 1 million kinds of jobs that the population can choose like on social media platforms or in science fields etc so I strongly believe that at
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 time, there are many
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 for working that everyone can do it.
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, now all members can
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 anything which they want, in ,addition there is a huge
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 of majors that help to
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 what they like,
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 the
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 of schools and universities is more than in the past that gives communities huge advantages and makes many choices.
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, in the ,past there were just a limited
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 of majors to
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 it but now there are a huge
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 of science stuffs so I think that now, the opportunity for studying is better than any time before.
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, others argue that even though there is a huge
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 of
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 but sometimes the competition is so tough to get what anybody likes
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 as working or studying. In my view, it is not practical because with pass time without our knowledge, there are many things are generated and are developed to help all and to make many
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 for them. Overall,
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 essay discussed if people have many
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 these days, so in my opinion, I agree especially if we talk about working and studying there are huge
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 for all to do what they want even if the
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 of the competition increase but still all humans have many
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 more than the past.
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