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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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A few authorities demand their employees to be in touch at any
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, regardless their day of rest.
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 company will pay you more for the extra
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 and effort, I believe, disadvantages outweigh advantages that, the leisure
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 with family gets reduced and employees will be more frustrated.
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 with, the administration may offer more pay to their team to make them available on particular situations.
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 will help the employee to earn more and to lead a life with high standards.
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: In United Kingdom, the organization provides performance incentives to those crew who are ready to pick up their officials’ call at any cost. Even though it may increase the rapport between them, I believe that its disadvantages stand high.
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, frequent calls and enquiries will lead the staffs to become irritated.
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, their concentration towards the work reduces and will reflect the outcome in an opposite manner.
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, the team members will have only less
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 to spend with their family. Their children will definitely miss the
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 playing with their parents at the park, a film together and all.
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 each worker contribute to their organization is inversely proportional to the moments with their loved ones.
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, the divorce rates are increasing rapidly.
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, I believe that being responsive to employers at any
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, has more demerits. In conclusion, I reckon that drawbacks like less family
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 and frustration outweighs the merits like more pay in a scenario where the higher officials need their subordinates to be available upon a ring, despite of their leave days.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Constant connectivity
  • Workplace availability
  • Crisis management
  • Decision-making
  • Competitive edge
  • Prompt response
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Remote work
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Personal time
  • Discontent
  • Morale
  • Productivity
  • Proper delegation
  • Team trust
  • Employee well-being
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