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Many people these days have computer, laptop and telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantage or disadvantage?

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In
this
 technological era Personal Computers ,mobiles and laptops have become a part of our daily lives. Due to the
,
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pandemic many
people
 have adapted to working from
home
 and it has become advantageous to many workers. In the
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 I will discuss both pros and cons of
this
 situation. Working from
home
 was most important to us during those two years of pandemics. Most of the employees highly relied on computers,and phones. Now we are completely dependent on those gadgets. As it has bought our world closer or we can say " The World Is In our palms" Co-workers don't need to travel to their offices as compared to past they can just start their PC and join the meeting. According to research by Oxford ,University most employees tend to spend more time with their families and friends compared to the past just because of work from
home
. Another research describes that the pollution in big cities has gone down due to remote working.
However
, every coin has two sides and there are
also
 a few drawbacks to
this
 condition.
To begin
 with , workers have become lazy as compared to the past. They are now neither productive nor active in their role in the company. One of the most renowned educational institutions in Canada says that
people
 working remotely has irrupted a lot of physical diseases
such
 as back pain and ankle sprain. And now
people
 are not ready to work in their offices. To conclude
this
 topic , there is an equal number of drawbacks and positive outcomes in
this
 situation.,
However
 in ,future we could see more
people
 working from
home
.
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