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Some say that secondary schools should spend less time on traditional subjects such as history and should spend more time on teaching communication skills and business courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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In
this
 contemporary era, it is much more important to spend time teaching communication
skills
 and
business
 courses than traditional
subjects
 like history which are not really helpful in real-life scenarios. Through
this
 essay, I strongly opine with the statement. To start with, traditional
subjects
 like history are very much needed in
schools
 to teach the younger generations to be aware of the past but stressing more time on it is useless while spending less on real-life
skills
 like communications
skills
 and
business
 courses which are more needed nowadays.
Likewise
, nowadays it is seen how ignorant their syllabus is when it comes to
skills
 like communication and
business
 which I think should change so that children can acquire more
skills
 from
schools
 than they are doing with traditional
subjects
.
On the other hand
, introducing skill-based
subjects
 in place of the traditional
subjects
 would result in students graduating from school being more ready and skilled for
further
 studies and jobs. Introducing
subjects
 like
this
 can make
schools
 more interesting.
Furthermore
, with more vocational
subjects
 it can give children a wider perspective to think about on what they want to pursue in the future. As long as
schools
 produce more skilled and responsible students it will directly improve a country's developing process and economy. To conclude, I think due to the things explained in
this
 essay only a limited time should be spent on the traditional
subjects
 so more focus could be diverted to vocational
skills
 like communication and
business
skills
 which will produce greater results as a whole.
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