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Stress has become a major problem in modern world. What are some causes of this and what can be the solution to them?

#stress #world
For example
, rising sea levels as well as disturbing the ecological balance are consequences of global warming. What is more, it may lead to natural disasters
such
 as devastating floods and
therefore
 famines, since excessive water supply will bring crops to fail. Under these circumstances, humanity will not be able to nourish themselves as well as livestock. Interestingly,
this
 is only a tiny piece of the clump of stuff that may occur as subconsequences of global warming, so now it is clear why it is one of the most horrid contemporary problems.
For example
, rising sea levels as well as disturbing the ecological balance are consequences of global warming. What is more, it may lead to natural disasters
such
 as devastating floods and
therefore
 famines, since excessive water supply will bring crops to fail. Under these circumstances, humanity will not be able to nourish themselves as well as livestock. Interestingly,
this
 is only a tiny piece of the clump of stuff that may occur as subconsequences of global warming, so now it is clear why it is one of the most horrid contemporary problems.
For example
, rising sea levels as well as disturbing the ecological balance are consequences of global warming. What is more, it may lead to natural disasters
such
 as devastating floods and
therefore
 famines, since excessive water supply will bring crops to fail. Under these circumstances, humanity will not be able to nourish themselves as well as livestock. Interestingly,
this
 is only a tiny piece of the clump of stuff that may occur as subconsequences of global warming, so now it is clear why it is one of the most horrid contemporary problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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