Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is a tremendously controversial
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heating up a debate
the
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origin of
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leadership
. While some
people
hold a strong view that it is a natural skill, the opposites make a statement that a person can become a
leader
through
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experience as well as
the
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knowledge.
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of view and my personal opinion about
this
phenomenon Evidently, a wealth of
people
are naturally born leaders since they own the strong characteristics to become a
leader
such
as being
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person, gregarious and full of energy. All these personality traits help the
leader
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to
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gather
people
together and
to
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inspire and motivate them. Vladimir Putin,
a
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president of Russia can be cited as an outstanding example that he
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political
leader
who inspires many
people
with his boundless professional abilities,
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and display
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skills
.
Hence
, being sociable,
charisma
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and having strong traits are important natural
skills
for being a chief.
Although
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leadership
skill is one of
natural
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skills
, I still
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that
it
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can be built and enhanced. There are a bunch of elements that make someone a great
leader
,
such
as discipline and resourcefulness, which can definitely be developed through one's upbringing and life period.
For instance
, to become a pioneer as well as a president of Vietnam, Hochiminh had to
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three decades
in
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this
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life
on
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travelling around the world and
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the
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knowledge from developed nations in
this
time to find an ideal way to lead our country.
Therefore
,
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a natural skill,
leadership
can be developed by
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experience in life. In conclusion,
although
a strong
leader
's talents and traits are both genetic and can be improved by training, observation, and a lot of hard work, there are many
people
born without natural
leadership
skills
who can still become good leaders thank
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their
attemption
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attention
.
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