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sales
 in four different retail sectors (
travel
,
film
/
music
, books and clothes) between 2003 and 2013 in New Zealand. Overall, the
travel
 and clothes industries both experienced a significant decline in
sales
, while
film
/
music
 and books both saw an increase after a decade.
In addition
, the
film
/
music
 industry overtook
travel
 as a leader in online shopping in 2013. The
travel
 sector accounted for the greatest percentage of
sales
 on the internet in 2003, at 36%.
However
,
this
 figure decreased to 29
percent
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 in 2013.
Similarly
,
although
 the clothes industry had the
second
 biggest market share in 2003 at 24%, its share fell dramatically in 2013.
On the other hand
, just over a fifth of online
sales
 in New Zealand were made in the
film
/
music
 industry in 2003, while
this
 number reach
at
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33% in 2013, which was the biggest portion of online
sales
 in the year.
Hence
,
this
 sector became the leader in the online market in 2013. The book
inustry
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industry
also
 saw a slight growth from 19 to 22
percent
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.
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