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More and more people are using computers and electronic devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As technology has evolved in the past years, it is now possible for people to stay informed through multimedia
devices
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 rather than conventional ones
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 as books and newspapers. In
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 essay, I will argue that in my opinion, there is no need anymore for
information
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paper
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 printed material.
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 with, the access to
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information
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 given by electronic
devices
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 is greater as well as more accurate.
For instance
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, during the Covid pandemic, in Quebec, the press was releasing crucial
information
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 on their phone application
everyday
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 at 11am after the prime
minister
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 press point.
This
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information
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 was
then
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 relayed in the
next
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day
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 newspaper, which means that by the time it was read, it was already obsolete.
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, when a mistake is made in the facts transmitted, it is easier and quicker to correct it on electronic
devices
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 as there is no need to print a new copy of the magazine or book.
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, conventional
devices
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 are contributing to pollution and environmental problems. The fabrication of
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paper printed
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 copies requires a huge amount of natural resources and energy. Indeed, trees are cut down
everyday
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 in order to produce
paper
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, which contributes to deforestation as well as climatic changes. Even though an increasing number of books are now made from recycled
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,
this
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 process is using chemicals,
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thus
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is
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not
being
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carbon neutral.
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, while electronics have a
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long-lasting
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long lasting
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 lifetime, magazines and newspapers are usually only read once before they are discarded,
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 expanding the wastage issue. In conclusion, as people will augment the use of their electronic
devices
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 to access
information
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, they will realize their superiority over books, magazines and newspapers,
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 these will no longer be necessary.
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