International air fares are falling and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity?

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The past decades have seen a dramatic decrease in the price of going abroad.

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, when the cost is affordable, more and more

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can travel overseas. It is argued that

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some bad effects on the world.

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others contend that

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is beneficial for most

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there are certain drawbacks to the growth of tourism, I would contend that the upsides are more glaring. On the one hand, the disadvantages need to be acknowledged.

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, as more

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visit the same place, it is sure that more trash will be dumped.

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, the environment will be polluted and can even cause air pollution.

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, thousands of

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come to Times Square every day and there is a tremendous number of trash being dumped annually.

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another negative phenomenon is that the price of everything is climbing significantly, when a place is noted as a tourist city, it will attract more visitors to come.

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is a perfect chance for sellers to higher the cost to make more money.

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, in my country, a coconut costs 30 USD in the capital city but just costs 5 USD in my city.

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, the merits pale in comparison with the demerits.

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the development of tourism activity can help an attraction to have more income. When many

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visit the same place, it will be famous and can attract more visitors to come. In my country, travelling helped us to earn about 20 million Viet Nam Dong in the

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year, to illustrate. In conclusion,

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there are some disadvantages, the increase in tourism activity still has more benefits. I suggest that we should visit or travel ethically, we should not dump trash or destroy anything.

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs ( for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children) to what extent do you agree or disagree?

some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

People are starting to think that the idea of having a single career is an old fashioned one and that having several part-time jobs is better. Do the benefits outweigh the disadvantage?

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