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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past.

#population #internet #text #face #communication
Nowadays there are
lot
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 of new technologies and social networks through which we can
talking
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,
texting
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 and even see each other.
Although
, some people think that with
internet
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the internet
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 we could
forgot
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 about real
communication
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this
 point. In
this
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 I will examine why
face to
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face
 conversation couldn’t stay in past.
Firstly
, the internet helps keep you connected in general when you don't see each other.
For example
, if someone will travel to another country we can always contact him and
also
 support him if he needs it and exactly
this
 will help us to keep our
communication
, while without
this
communication
 could stop for some time or even end completely
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for ever
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.
Moreover
,
face to
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face-to-face
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face
communication
 is
a
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basic
neediness
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 for our biological species. Only by communicating
face
 to
face
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 we can feel genuine emotions and feelings
,
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 since only when a person is physically near we can feel him and feel not alone what we need undoubtedly.
On the other hand
, current internet technologies
gives
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 us more and more opportunities with which we
able
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 to do a lot of things via
communication
 using social networking.
For
example
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 we can make a group video call with all
friends
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our friends
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 together
in
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 the same time to communicate
instead
 of
meet
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 with them and situations like
this
 really start to destroy
face to
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face-to-face
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face
communication
. In conclusion, I could say that
although
 virtual
communication
 spreads,
face to
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face
communication
 will never die since it will remain
our
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 essential part of life.
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