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Government should spend more on rails than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Railways
 are extensively opted by
public
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 to
travel
; especially, long distances and to transport goods as compared to
road
 transportation. Due to
its
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 safety and speed rails are more popular among people rather than roads. Considering the extensively growing demand for commuting
in
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 rails, I strongly advocate that, governing bodies should invest more
on
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railways
 to tackle environmental issues and provide accessibility throughout the country.
To begin
 with,
railways
 have dedicated
track
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 except at the crossings keeping the traffic
congestions
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congestion
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 to minimal allowing on-time reach to the destinations. Train journey has proven to be much safer as trained engineers are employed to govern its course.
For example
, Shathabdhi express gets a clear route to
travel
 and any unintended interruptions are immediately addressed by the assigned professionals enabling
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on time
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 safe arrival. Though the implementation cost might be higher for
railways
, returns are far
more
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better.
Thus
 civic bodies should concentrate on
development
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the development
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 of
railways
 to avoid any detrimental impact on
environment
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the environment
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 and construct more railway lines to provide accessibility of
railways
 throughout the country.
On the contrary
,
road
 transport
are
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 mostly clumsy as everybody
have
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 access to it unlike
in
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railways
 where only its employees assigned can operate.
Plethora
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 of variety of vehicles like cycles, bikes, four wheels,
heavy duty
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 vehicles are all present on
road
 making it impossible to handle it at best to avoid accidents,
this
also
 leads to traffic congestion delaying the
travel
 time to reach required location.
For instance
, even emergency vehicles like
ambulance
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 and fire extinguishers fail to arrive at the expected time costing
lives
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 of people. While the expenses for
road
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the road
a road
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 in terms of building and
maintaining
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 is cheaper, its multifold downsides cannot be denied. To conclude, commuting through
railways
 are beneficial for
the
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apply
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society as compared to roads. If the problems are kept at
the
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minimal
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,
then
 no doubt rail
transports
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transport
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 will be chosen by
public
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the public
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 for all types of
travel
.
Thus
 civic bodies should extend more financial support
in
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 the development of rails rather than roads.
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