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Government should spend more on rails than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Railways
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 are extensively opted by
public
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the public
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 to
travel
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; especially, long distances and to transport goods as compared to
road
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 transportation. Due to
its
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their
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 safety and speed rails are more popular among people rather than roads. Considering the extensively growing demand for commuting
in
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by
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 rails, I strongly advocate that, governing bodies should invest more
on
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railways
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 to tackle environmental issues and provide accessibility throughout the country.
To begin
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 with,
railways
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 have dedicated
track
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tracks
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 except at the crossings keeping the traffic
congestions
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congestion
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 to minimal allowing on-time reach to the destinations. Train journey has proven to be much safer as trained engineers are employed to govern its course.
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, Shathabdhi express gets a clear route to
travel
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 and any unintended interruptions are immediately addressed by the assigned professionals enabling
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on-time
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on time
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on-time
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 safe arrival. Though the implementation cost might be higher for
railways
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, returns are far
more
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better.
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 civic bodies should concentrate on
development
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the development
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 of
railways
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 to avoid any detrimental impact on
environment
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the environment
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 and construct more railway lines to provide accessibility of
railways
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 throughout the country.
On the contrary
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,
road
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 transport
are
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 mostly clumsy as everybody
have
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 access to it unlike
in
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railways
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 where only its employees assigned can operate.
Plethora
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A plethora
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 of variety of vehicles like cycles, bikes, four wheels,
heavy duty
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 vehicles are all present on
road
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 making it impossible to handle it at best to avoid accidents,
this
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also
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 leads to traffic congestion delaying the
travel
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 time to reach required location.
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, even emergency vehicles like
ambulance
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ambulances
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 and fire extinguishers fail to arrive at the expected time costing
lives
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the lives
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 of people. While the expenses for
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road
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the road
a road
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 in terms of building and
maintaining
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maintenance
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 is cheaper, its multifold downsides cannot be denied. To conclude, commuting through
railways
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 are beneficial for
the
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apply
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society as compared to roads. If the problems are kept at
the
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a
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minimal
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,
then
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 no doubt rail
transports
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transport
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 will be chosen by
public
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the public
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 for all types of
travel
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.
Thus
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 civic bodies should extend more financial support
in
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to
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 the development of rails rather than roads.

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