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Influence of human beings on the world’s ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Environmental issues have been one of the concerns recently. The world's ecosystem is threatened by man-made that lead to numerous species extinction, as well as biodiversity loss.
This
 essay will highlight the main factors of bio-diversity, along with the modus operandi that can be done. On the one hand, a section of society holds a belief that the weak of law enforcement is a prominent issue compared to other problems. Seeing believing, a plethora of cases
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related to these problems come from illegal logging activities without a permit from the authorities. Recent news from "The times" , has found at least 50% of logging activities have been reported annually in Malaysia.
On the other hand
, a multitude of pragmatic steps can be done in order to curb
this
 issue,
for example
, making
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 environmental campaign every single week. Undoubtedly, it will be
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huge assistance in spreading
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awareness to every level of age group regarding
this
 inevitable phenomenon.
Additionally
, the government needs to introduce a new policy for every environmental law regulation.
For instance
, those companies that have the desire to start logging activities, need to refer to the specific location that has been listed by the authorities so it will not distract the
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 life
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there. In conclusion,
although
 the weak law regulation and lack of awareness are the primary concern for environmental problems, they can be addressed by a proper environmental campaign, together with new policies that can be created by the government. I reckon that it is still possible to at least mitigate the repercussions if all these suggestions can be applied in the future.
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