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Nowadays most green energy is becoming ever more prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The world today uses more renewable
energy
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 than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound;
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, some argue that green
energy
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 could undermine the reliability of the global supply
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 of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena.
This
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 essay will examine both views, but personally, I strongly advocate the adoption of renewable sources of
energy
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. On the one hand, opponents of renewables claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be fully adopted.
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 is largely
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 the fact that many green
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technologies
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 currently in use depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena
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 as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can only be used in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and
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 the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could still result in a blackout if we depended entirely on solar power; something
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 unlikely to occur today given current oil stockpiles.
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, fossil fuels are a larger threat to
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 security since they are certainly finite in quantity,
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 renewable
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 is effectively infinite; once the Earth’s oil is depleted, there will be no
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 security without green
energy
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technologies
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.
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, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery
technologies
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 (to create a larger buffer), building more renewable
energy
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 generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current
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 (to increase efficiency),
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 as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of renewables
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 claim that they are the most economically sound option.
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,
while
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 many may believe that green
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technologies
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 are a threat to
energy
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 security, the fossil fuels they frequently promote are a greater threat, and renewables are in fact the only sound option, both economically and environmentally.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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