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The key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There has been a controversy about whether reducing the living standard is the key solution to protect the
environment
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. I think there are other solutions, and they will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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, using renewable
energy
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. There are two types of
energy
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 in the world;
one
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 is non-renewable, and
one
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 is renewable. Non-renewable
energy
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,
such
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 as
oil
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, machines rely on it to function, and it's can influence the country's economy.
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,
this
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energy
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 has a significant negative impact on the
environment
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.
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, it brings about global warming and can cause air pollution.
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, renewable
energy
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 is environmentally friendly, and it's inexhaustible. It can be said that renewable plays an essential role in protecting the
environment
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.
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, using fewer
plastic
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products
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. On the
one
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 hand,
plastic
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 brings convenience to our life that it can be carried around easily.
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, it's detrimental to the
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. According to some statistical figures,
plastic
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 can affect the production of agricultural
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, water resources, and wild animals' lives.
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, if some
plastic
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products
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 are dropped to the ground, their toxic parts will be absorbed by the soil, and it will result in the reduction of agricultural
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.
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, taking more frequent public transport. As we know,
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 of the biggest contributors to climate change is a growth in carbon emission;
oil
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 plays a vital role in it.
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, were we to control the consumption of
oil
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, the situation could be improved to a large extent.
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 of the most effective ways to consume less
oil
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 is to take public transport more often. In conclusion, there are three most helpful solutions to improve the
environment
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable lifestyles
  • renewable resources
  • environmental conservation
  • shift towards greener technologies
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • fossil fuels
  • green technology
  • environmental sacrifices
  • quality of life
  • systemic change
  • corporate responsibility
  • governmental regulations
  • individual actions
  • consumption patterns
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