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Some people say that history offers no practical benefit to society while others claim that history teaches us to understand the present. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The question of whether
history
 offers a benefit to society is one which is debated. Some
people
 claim it does while others say it is waste of time. I believe that
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history
 is an important tool for us to learn from past human errors and is vital for those who work in certain professions. On one side of the debate are those
people
 who argue that
history
 really offers nothing for society today. They claim that, for the majority of jobs, there is no requirement for
people
 to have any prior knowledge of
history
. Good examples are professionals
such
 as accountants, retail workers or even those on the construction sites, who go about their daily work without any need to know what happened during events in the past. On the other side, there are other
people
 who claim that
history
 is extremely relevant to the world today as it is a tool to learn from our past mistakes.
History
 teaches us that atrocities from times gone by
such
 as war should not be repeated.
Hence
, teaching the youngsters of today about
this
 past behaviour will hopefully prevent
history
 from repeating itself. Many
people
 around the world were subjected to slavery and we know now that
this
 type of human treatment is unethical and immoral. In my view, I support the idea of teaching offspring about the events of the past because I would hate to think that we did not learn from mistakes humanity made. I believe it does have
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practical befit as some professions require detailed knowledge of historical events. These would be teachers and professors at the University
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