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Some people think that Government should take measures to improve the health of its citizens. Others think it must be managed by individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that official organizations have to prevent citizens from
health
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 problems because citizens have the right to be taken properly healthcare by the
government
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. Others say that
health
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 conditions should be regarded as their individuals not
government
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 matters. I discuss both views on
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 issue. It is widely accepted that the healthcare policies of the
government
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 can play an important key role in improving public
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 conditions. Backing through history, there is a clear relationship between the strategy of public
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 by the
government
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 and the number of infections of common diseases.
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, from 1960 to the 70s, several Japanese suffered from asthma because of serious air pollution. Advancing industrialization and increasing factories caused
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 problems at that time.
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, the Japanese
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 regulated the emission of industrial pollution to preserve citizens' lives.
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, others think that well-being problems should be mattered as individuals It is difficult to be regulated by governments because there are various opinions about healthcare.
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, eating habits are one of the main factors is related to
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’s
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 issues. Recently,
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 can get various healthy food recipes very easily through the internet or media, but whether they cook the meal or not, according to their values. In conclusion, no matter how the
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 takes measurement growing awareness of the importance of
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,
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 who do not take care of their
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 will not do.
People
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 must notice the need for balanced diets by themselves.
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