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Supermarkets should only sell food products from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

#supermarkets #food #products #country #imports
First
 of all,
Art
 and
artist
 are the most crucial part in our
life
, for many reasons: they make us happy, relaxed, fuel our energy for
life
. Reach their ideas to to fill our needs of aesthetics and enjoyment.
Second
, artists couldn't live without tremendous imagination of their ideas and expression in a form of artworks within painting, books, music, and so on. That's why in my point of view, artists should not restrict by the government or
society
. The censorship will limit their creativity. The restrictions harm their glory because they found to debate their ideas in
this
 way of expression. One the other hand,
artist
 should not cross the boundaries by some kinds of
art
such
 us :
art
that is
 offensive of certain of any creed, religion, or beliefs . The
art
 that supports the erotic in the
society
. Rules and regulation it's important in any part of the
life
 to build a strong and good
society
. But should be in a strict way. The
artist
 has an immense creativity and imagination that hadn't better buried it. Because the
art
 and
artist
 contribute the prosper and progress . In conclusion :
art
 and
artist
 allowed us to expand our imagination that guarantee us a stratified
life
 by make us feeling pleasure and sharing their valuable thoughts That fun-filled our emotions and sensitives by their : music, books, paintings, and so on .
Artist
 should be encouraged by the government and
society
 ; as long as, they committed to respect and provide sensual and visual pleasure to us.
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