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QUESTION; In many countries plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do u think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In most nations,
rubber
holders
 are
commonly
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more commonly
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 used than before as most eatery firms
makes
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 the most
use
 of
it
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them
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.
This
 essay will argue that despite
rubber
holders
 becoming popular, the demerits of Cuisine organisation using them to parcel
foods
for
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apply
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exceeds the merits.
Afterwards
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 a meaningful conclusion shall be drawn.
Firstly
 availability of rubbers is one of the enormous reasons making it to be commonly used.
This
 is because firms and other factories that solely produce these
containers
 have been established and in full operation.
As a result
, it has become very easy for one to have access to rubbers which
is
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are
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 used in packaging
foods
 and
drink
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drinks
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 for sale or on daily basis.
Furthermore
 , the attractive nature it gives to
foods
 and drinks after
use
 cause most institutions to
use
rubber
holders
. Some are made into nice designs with various colours and so when used it attract customers to buy them.
For example
. it was revealed that about 75% of customers who consume drinks prefer
rubber
containers
 because to them, it is appealing
Thus
 how nice and easy it is to get
rubber
holders
 , accounts for the increase in
use
. Despite the beauty it gives food and how readily available it is to get them,
rubber
containers
 cannot go without a challenge and one of them is the health problems
it
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they
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pose
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poses
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 to users. A key factor to
this
 is that the
containers
 are made up of certain harmful substances which react with warm
foods
 when placed into them releasing
it
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their
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 content and poisoning the food even before it
is consume
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is consumed
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.As
this
 continue , it leads to diseases like cancers and heart diseases over time. More so, these
rubber
containers
 after
use
 are not properly disposed
off
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of
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 but
left
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are left
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 all over choking gutters when it rains rendering
lot
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a lot
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 of people homeless because of
flood
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the flood
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.
For instance
, the NDAMO coordinator announced that the recent flooding of Accra was a result of
rubber
containers
 blocking major gutters.
Thus
 the lives and health of people are at risk with the
increase
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use
 of
rubber
containers
. In Conclusion, after examining the benefits and
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drawbacks
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draw backs
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drawbacks
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. it is felt that the drawbacks far outweigh the benefits. I will
therefore
 recommend that the
use
 of
rubber
holders
 be
ban
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banned
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.
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