In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Agriculture plays a vital role in providing food around the globe, but despite the advancement in

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particular sector, still,

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people suffering from hunger at the international level.

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with the causes of

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scenario, in spite of, how much the world has moved from traditional ways of bowing crops with man labour to doing that with advanced technologies, people still lack basic foods on an international scale. The main reason behind

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most ,countries are focusing more on industrialization as it generates a

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amount of revenue than the agricultural sector.

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, almost all the

western

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nations' economy runs on industries including the prominent names of Europe, the USA and Australia.

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only Asia relies on the production of crops to be their main

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of income,

subsequently

,there are not adequate resources to feed all the nations. to overcome

this

serious issue, not only The World Health Organization but

also

the developed countries need to play a vital role to overcome

this

serious issue. First and foremost, they should organize numerous seminars to spread the advantages of advanced equipment and practice how to employ them in fields, it will help to ease and fasten the work of local farmers.

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, more production will be attained.

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, they must provide special assistance in terms of grants to farmers.

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Asia who

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revenues for food are often poor, and financial aid will never restrict them from ploughing agricultural land.

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, developed nations' positive role is required to overcome world hunger with the assistance of WHO as most of the time it is the poorer parts of the earth which severely suffer a shortage of food.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
knowledge
food waste

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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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