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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Agriculture plays a vital role in providing food around the globe, but despite the advancement in
this
 particular sector, still,
the
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people suffering from hunger at the international level.
To begin
 with the causes of
this
 scenario, in spite of, how much the world has moved from traditional ways of bowing crops with man labour to doing that with advanced technologies, people still lack basic foods on an international scale. The main reason behind
this
 is
as
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 most ,countries are focusing more on industrialization as it generates a
great
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 amount of revenue than the agricultural sector.
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, almost all the
western
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 nations' economy runs on industries including the prominent names of Europe, the USA and Australia.
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 only Asia relies on the production of crops to be their main
resource
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 of income,
subsequently
 ,there are not adequate resources to feed all the nations. to overcome
this
 serious issue, not only The World Health Organization but
also
 the developed countries need to play a vital role to overcome
this
 serious issue. First and foremost, they should organize numerous seminars to spread the advantages of advanced equipment and practice how to employ them in fields, it will help to ease and fasten the work of local farmers.
Subsequently
, more production will be attained.
Secondly
, they must provide special assistance in terms of grants to farmers.
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. the people from
east
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 Asia who
generates
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 revenues for food are often poor, and financial aid will never restrict them from ploughing agricultural land.
To conclude
, developed nations' positive role is required to overcome world hunger with the assistance of WHO as most of the time it is the poorer parts of the earth which severely suffer a shortage of food.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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