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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading and writing. With the advent of computer skill be made as fourth aubject to be added. To what extent do you agree?

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For several years, reading and writing are regarded as essential components of education. For now, computer skill is included as
fourth
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aubject
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subject
. In my opinion, computer
skills
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 are very important because they are essential in
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 world, and can enhance efficiency. Nowadays, most businesses utilize computers in their offices.
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, employers must deal with their tasks by using
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. It means that mastering how to make use of computers is as important as reading and writing because of
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 usage of them in the world. When it comes to another aspect, workers should use their devices for communication.
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, some communication tools are used among the community,
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 as notion and slack. Every day, people in the enterprise tend to contact
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each
others
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 by using these applications.
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 is because learning about techniques for using devices is crucial
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the
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society.
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 to that, if
poeple
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people
 have
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improved typing
skills
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, they can spend
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fewer hours on writing.
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, several years ago, students should write on papers for exams. In fact, it took much time
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 and made them tired to do that.
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, typing
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lap-tops
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 let students write faster than they did in the past.
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, educated typing techniques are able to improve efficiency. In conclusion, crucial subjects of education which are reading and writing have
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 for many years.
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,
skills
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 for using devices are included as a fourth
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subject
. I believe that techniques for personal computers are important
skills
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.
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, they enhance efficiency.
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