Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Smartphones

seem to be an essential product and are popularly used among

children

, some people believe these digital devices are harmful to their personal

development

, and others believe it is beneficial for the youngest to connect with the

Internet

.

This

essay will discuss both views and the reasons caused

this

situation

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and my opinions in the forthcoming paragraphs.

To begin

with, the significant reason for raising the use of these technological devices is the advancement of technology and

development

in digital-based.

In other words

,

Smartphones

improvise all the functions

such

as entertainment, communication and searching the resources by using the

internet

, which is incomparable to other objects or activities

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and is a significant

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of

smartphones

.

For instance

, research in Hong Kong reveals that more than one-

third

of interviewees spend more than five hours using

smartphones

because of convenience and accessibility, allowing the user uses

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However

, some people believe these devices significantly harm

children

's

development

. To illustrate, the entertainment provided on the

internet

,

such

as videos and games, potentially causes addiction if there is no monitoring of the contents and the time of use.

Moreover

,

children

might not have the ability to identify the proper things, which may lead them into traps,

such

as privacy breaches or

internet

fraud.

For example

, in China, authorities revealed a case where a teenager who was addicted to playing mobile phone games and forced their parents to give him a credit card to purchase virtual goods in games, which

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to bankruptcy and personal information being breached simultaneously. In conclusion,

smartphones

are becoming popular among

children

because of their functions and entertainment.

However

, it potentially causes harmful effects on

children

’s

development

. Personally, I believe widely use of mobile phones among

children

is a negative

development

.