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It is becoming more and more difficult to eacape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society.

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Nowadays, modern
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 are stuck by social
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 in daily life. It has two different sides for
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 who live in
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rich
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 and use social
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 frequently. I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give my own opinions.
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 of all, technology makes
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 strongly rely on social
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 per day. There are many social platforms that provide many different functions for
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 to get the information they want. It is easy and quick to receive various news from one app.
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,
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 can read the news or search for some activities, and even if
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 can find old friends on Facebook.
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, social
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 is a platform that can connect different
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 around the world.
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 via
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 application share their daily life on social
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,
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, busy
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 can get their friend's news from social
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, no need to manage a date to meet each other.
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,
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 get used to social
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 to know their friends' information, and
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 are colder than before. It causes some behaviours among young
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, they use their smartphones to text who they hang out with at the moment, not have conversations face to face.
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,
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 only show their wonderful side on social
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 and hide their true side.
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, some
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 like to share that they go to expensive restaurants or buy luxury items. It affects young
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’s values to pursue high expenses. In conclusion, social
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 enriches
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's lives while it damages
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. It seems
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 are closer to each other but actually the result is not like that.
People
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 should not rely on social
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 to connect with their friends, because you might just see the only side.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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