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It is more important for doctors to have good communication skills than to have deep knowledge in their discipline/field/specialization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#doctors #communication #skills #discipline #field #specialization
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Some argue that It is
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 for
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a physician
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physician
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physicians
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 to get a relationship than to broaden
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 about their major. I partly agree with
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 view and believe both are very vital to a
Doctor
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 On the one hand, good relationships are necessary for a
physician
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 to
acourate
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accurate
 diagnosis and help them to counsel appropriately.
for example
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, when
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Doctor
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doctors
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 communicate with
patients
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, they can create a good interpersonal relationship,
physician
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 can share with
patients
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 about life experiences,
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health
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and health
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 status and
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create
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creat
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create
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 trust for
patients
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,
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 so that
patients
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 can easily give a lot of information about their
health
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 problems with Doctors.
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,
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-patient communication is a very important factor and positive reinforcement is a leading strategy that many
health
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 professionals usually use to enhance the level of reliability of each medical treatment. Clearly,
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a
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apply
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better
aelf
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self
 confidence, a medical
doctor
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 can show his or her abilities to cure diseases and become prosperous in finding the causes of their
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patients's
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problem
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problems
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.
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, The
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 is
also
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 vital for
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Doctor
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Doctors
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 in their career.
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, it helps them become a good
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,
Physician
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 are always
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some
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 new information about their major to give an accurate diagnosis.
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, when I treat
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a patient I might know to examine,
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identify
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and identifiy
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identifiy
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identify
symbol
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 to give
prescription
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a prescription
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. Especially when treatment
is fail
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, I need to a new treatment
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regimen
renew
reginew
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regimen
. In conclusion, I believe that
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 and
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communication
comunication
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communication
 skill are both advantages,
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 of medical science
in
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is
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 necessary for
doctor
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,
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however
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 good communication make them
have
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great
health
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 worker.
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