Some people believe that the best way to improve the quality of healthcare in a country is to train and hire more doctors and nurses. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some people argue that the

quality

of

healthcare

in a country is determined by the number of medical staff. I totally agree

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that is

important, but I

also

believe that there are many more factors

take

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part in

this

problem. On the one hand, I agree that human resources are the key factor

of

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the

healthcare

industry. First of all,

doctors

and nurses play

in

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an

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important role in taking

care

and

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treatment

for

the

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patients. If there is no one with them, they not receiving good

care

,

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will

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lead to many

risk

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of

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their condition during

the

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time at the hospital.

For example

, after the surgery

total

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hip replacement the patient

need

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time to recover. They would not be able to stand up, to take

care

of themselves if there would not

any

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medical staff around to look

after

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,

tell

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them what to do and not to do.

In addition

, doctor and

nurses

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qualification is a determining

factor

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in the

quality

of

healthcare

.

Doctors

need to improve their certifications,

access

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and access

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to

mordern

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modern

techniques for

a

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better

treatment

.

On the other hand

,

i

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would like to emphasize the

important

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of

government

and facilities, like

private

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a private

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hospital

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hospitals

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in improving the

quality

of the health

care

system. Before

of

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all, the

government

should pay more attention to public hospitals, creating

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the condition

a condition

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condition

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conditions

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for

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the hospital

a hospital

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hospital

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hospitals

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to improve.

Nevertheless

, the

government

should support more policies for medical workers to help them stabilize their life to devote the cause of

healthcare

.

Finally

, more and more

hospital

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hospitals

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should be

build

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to

improving

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the

quality

of health

care

. For

instant

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, currently, private

hospital

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hospitals

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like Vinmec invest in many modern machines to help

doctors

for the

treatment

more effectively. In conclusion, I agree that training and

hire

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more

doctors

and nurses is

good

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a good

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solution to improve the

quality

of

treatment

and

care

for

the

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patients.

However

, I

also

want

that

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the

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government

pay

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more attention to help achieve the best

quality

of

healthcare

.