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Some people believe that the best way to improve the quality of healthcare in a country is to train and hire more doctors and nurses. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #quality #healthcare #country #train #doctors #nurses
In some people's opinion, to increase the
quality
 of healthcare, we need to have more medical
staff
 with high
quality
 who is trained professional. I agree
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partially
partialy
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partially
 with that idea
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because
beause
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because
 some reasons follow: First of all, medical
staff
 who is working in
medical
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a medical
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inviroment
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environment
environments
, direct treatment for the patients,
their
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and their
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 professional
skill
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skills
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 will impact the
patient
's
outcome
. If they have high qualifications, the
patient
's
outcome
 will be good. If their skill is low, the treatment result of the
patient
 is low. Even they can cause unwanted complications for the patients.
A
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The
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 medical
staff
 was
good
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well
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 trained, they will be
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 with the patients. So
doctors
 and
nurse
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nurses
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 need to update their knowledge usually and
continously
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continuously
. With
this
 aspect, I agree with
above
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the above
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 opinion.
However
, the
quality
 of medical
staff
don't
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 decide everything for
outcome
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the outcome
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 of the
patient
. You know, outside of
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the skill
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skill
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skills
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 of
doctors
 and
nurse
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nurses
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, we need
to
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apply
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more
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have more
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 good
equitments
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equipment
 to reach high
the
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apply
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patient's
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patient
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outcome
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outcomes
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. The people with
the
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apply
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high
quality
 but
they
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apply
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have to work with
unfashionable
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the unfashionable
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 facility, they can not take a satisfactory diagnosis and appropriate treatment for the
patient
. Currently,
doctors
 will not
able
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be able
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 to disease diagnosis require at
the
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a
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 very early stage without
mordern
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modern
equiments
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equipment
requirements
. With developing
social
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society
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, the disease is diagnosed at the cell level or molecular level. So fashion facility is
emmergency
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emergency
 require.
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, with
above
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the above
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 causes, I
partialy
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partially
 agree with
opinion
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the opinion
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 that training and
hire
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hiring
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 more
doctors
 and nurses to improve the
quality
 of healthcare.
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