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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #doctors #researchers #time
The modern
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medicine
medinice
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medicine
 develops dramatically in recent years.
This
 requires the
doctors
 to extend their role, not only in treating the
patients
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 but
also
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 part in medical trials.
Although
 many people accept
this
 fact, I would insist that
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doctors
 should focus on the
patients
. On the one hand, treatment is not easy.
First
 of all, the development of medical techniques
such
 as CT, MRI,
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 scans... helps to detect new diseases.
Therefore
, the
doctors
 must update
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 knowledge and state-of-the-art techniques to improve healthcare qualities and they have no time for researching
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 their own.
Secondly
, the future of medicine is individual treatment.
This
 means that each patient needs a specific approach and treatment. The time for each patient will increase. There is no doubt that the physicians couldn't join any studies.
On the other hand
, it is true to say that an academic researcher needs different qualities from a clinician.
Firstly
, a researcher needs to be good at mathematics.
This
 is far from the daily practice of a doctor.
For example
, a good cardiologist will need to be good at clinical examination, hearing the heart sounds,
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 familiar with cardiovascular medicine. There is no way to help him to be a mathematician with his learning or routine practice.
Besides
, it takes many years to become good
doctors
. They spend a large part of their life in the hospital: staying with
patients
, acquiring new skills,
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 countless night shifts. I'm sure that the academic
researches
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 will invite them to join,
this
 will raise the question of wasting their talents for
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 wrong purpose. In conclusion, being good
doctors
 and academic researchers at the same time appears to be a new concept. Personally, I hold the idea of keeping
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traditional
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tradiotional
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traditional
 role of
doctors
. The
patients
 need them, not researchers.
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