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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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At an early age,
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 right or wrong and how to have good manners. In that case, parents and teachers
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 an important role in behaving young
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, but to what
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 are still accepted as a punishment if they do something wrong?
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. In my personal opinion,
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they should be punished
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 in some cases, there are some
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unacceptable like physically hurting or verbally hurting them. When
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, when these bad behaviours
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 on happening, asking them to reflect and think
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 can be useful to make them understand
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what they have done wrong.
Although
 some
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 might act out and disobey, taking what's theirs can be a simple punishment like their gadget or something they like to make them reflect and understand that their behaviours have consequences.
On the other hand
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 they can deduct their scores if their behaviour is related to it,
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, generally an important part of their progress of having good attitude and manners is by giving good examples as they tend to follow by example.
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 explaining and showing them what could happen with their bad behaviours, supposedly, with the right mind they would have a good understanding. Even though parenting and teaching young
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 is not as simple as we think, we all need to remember that patience is key.
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Focus on clearly organizing your essay into paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details. Consider having an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion for better readability and structure.
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Provide more specific examples and thorough explanations to support your main points. This will help make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
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Your essay addresses both parts of the question, discussing the importance of teaching right and wrong to children and the types of punishment that could be used.
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You have provided a clear opinion on the topic and outlined your stance on appropriate forms of punishment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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