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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the problems associated with and some possible solutions?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work
This
 chart compares the long-term international migration in the UK in terms of the figures
of
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net
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 and the changes in
immigration
 and
emigration
 from 1999 to 2008. It is obvious that both
immigration
 and
emigration
 went up with fluctuation in
this
 period and
the
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immigration
 was always more than
the
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emigration
.
In addition
,the number of
net
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 reached
to
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its peak in 2001. In 1999,
the
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immigration
 and
emigration
 started in about 290
thousand
people
 and 460
thousand
people
 respectively.In the
next
 3 years,both of them experienced an increase and kept stably between 2002 to 2003.
Then
,the
immigration
 rose rapidly and reached
to
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its peak,600
thousand
people
 in 2006.In comparison,there was a little drop before the
emigration
 got to 400
thousand
people
,in 2006.
Finally
,
the
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emigration
 increased by
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 90
thousand
people
,to 420
thousand
 from 2007 to 2008. The figure of net began at about 170
thousand
 and dropped to its lowest figure,about 150
thousand
 in 2003.
Nevertheless
,it soared
it
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 the
next
 year to about 250
thousand
,which is the peak of the figures in
this
 period.
Then
,it decreased in the
next
 5 years to about 180
thousand
.
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