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Online education is rapidly increasing in popularity. What has led to this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online learning compared to in-class instructions? Provide examples and explanations.

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People
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 learning online is becoming more popular in modern society. As the network development, it brings convenient study,
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, I believe that
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 online has some benefits and drawbacks compared to face-to-face classrooms. On the
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 hand, the technique improvement brings some advantages
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 online studying which
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 in traditional
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 of all, it is easier to learn everything whatever the location
people
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 stay in, or the language they speak,
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 thing they need just to connect internet.
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, in recent years, free Wi-Fi is around public areas
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 as coffee shops and train stations, which brings convenience for
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 waiting for friends or travelling to another city.
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, online
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 is
more free
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 and
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people
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 can choose the
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 which is suitable for them to learn or develop their own skills.
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, many specific courses are provided on some online
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 platforms which are beneficial for
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 with relative jobs to gain much deeper knowledge.
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, online
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 has some drawbacks.
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people
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 have to be self-control, not only that but
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 manager,
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, many online
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 are recorded and
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 no
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 will monitor
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,
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 easily lose concentration while they are taking the
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. More importantly,
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that
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 asking questions.
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, when
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 attend the course at present, they can ask questions directly, unlikely, online
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 have to search for the answers by using google or email to their teachers,
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 get the answers which might be incorrect or take
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 period of
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online
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network and technique improvements, and it
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 has many pros and cons of its educational methods.
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